Question 2

2. In a previous assignment, you wrote an introduction article in the “F” pattern. Based on what we discussed in class and based on the feedback provided in class, write a new introductory “content” incorporating “plain English writing for the web” in the “F” pattern including visuals. You are to include your “revised version” (if the version you submitted was not in the F-Pattern). Ensure that it addresses the three main objectives of plain English writing. As a reminder, this is an introductory post for your business. Ensure you list it in your hardcopy. (12 Marks)

Original Version:

Revised version – 

WHO WE ARE

Welcome to ThriftedThreads Resale, a World run on Sustainability!

ThriftedThreads understands how valuable second-hand clothing is for the future. We provide quality clothing at low prices for those looking to boost their style!

Looking to shop? Find our web store here.

STAYING SUSTAINABLE

Reusing and recycling clothes helps the environment a lot more than you would think. 

Did you know that:

  • 1 T-shirt takes 2700 liters of water to make.
  • About 60% of materials used by the fashion industry are made from plastic.
  • Chemicals and toxins are released into the air when creating new clothing with textiles and dyes. 
  • Greenhouse gases contain harmful chemicals that pollute our air, water, and soil. 

Shopping second-hand helps you reduce your carbon footprint and promote waste reduction!

WHAT WE DO

ThriftedThreads believes in giving back to the community as much as possible! 

We donate a large portion of profits to a charity chosen by our supporters (YOU) at the end of each month.  

After purchasing an item, buyers will receive an email asking them to vote for one of three charities they want their money donated to.  

The charity with the highest number of votes at the end of each month will receive a public donation from our profits!  

Every purchase from ThriftedThreads helps those in need.  Stay Sustainable and shop with us today! – Web Store


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